tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post4329714859175869704..comments2023-12-30T17:31:11.883+00:00Comments on The Solitary Walker: Villanelle For Doomed YouthThe Solitary Walkerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11284354541952038339noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-7551493061750579032010-11-25T06:21:21.004+00:002010-11-25T06:21:21.004+00:00Welcome back,SW.
Like ksam I'm not sure why, b...Welcome back,SW.<br />Like ksam I'm not sure why, but this has a very powerful message for me which works well. Something of the sureness and awareness of putting one foot in front of the other but not understanding the whole behind it.<br />...TrampTramphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10367405984066895755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-76983391930720243022010-11-24T19:47:09.315+00:002010-11-24T19:47:09.315+00:00Thanks everyone for your comments.
Rachel, astut...Thanks everyone for your comments. <br /><br />Rachel, astute as always - you are quite right. Deep down I was woried about the last quatrain. Will rethink.The Solitary Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11284354541952038339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-53410833161118284392010-11-24T03:44:53.384+00:002010-11-24T03:44:53.384+00:00Well, simply as a reader and appreciator...terrifi...Well, simply as a reader and appreciator...terrific, very moving. I haven't a clue how you poets do what it is you do, I'm just grateful for what ever it is that moves you to do it. I've no talent that way, just know that I like it and need it! The only thing I've got in common with a poet is sharing a birthday with Emily Dickinson. So a long way round to saying thank you, Robert and all the rest of you poets!ksamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01998231466478015431noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-3892070196900969492010-11-23T22:59:08.260+00:002010-11-23T22:59:08.260+00:00This is very good. Very powerful. In spite of the ...This is very good. Very powerful. In spite of the 'cocked up' pre-penultumate line. <br />It is so good to see decent poetry on a blog.Frikohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04277167831642088694noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-6035993412355627972010-11-23T22:32:33.768+00:002010-11-23T22:32:33.768+00:00I did wonder if it was a... cock-up. But don't...I did wonder if it was a... cock-up. But don't new things often come from mistakes..?<br />I'm quite sure you can come up with another line yourself... if you want one.<br />If you're going to lose an A rhyme I'd drop the scud line. It feels wrong to me (and I'm sure you like it but sometimes it's the bits and rhymes you're most pleased with that have to be sacrificed in the end... for the greater good) .<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-11530745986892219872010-11-23T22:23:46.445+00:002010-11-23T22:23:46.445+00:00Loved the villanelle, Robert! Very poignant — so ...Loved the villanelle, Robert! Very poignant — so many consigned to these endless and meaningless wars. Structurally, this is superb. Without getting into the requirements for a villanelle, about which I know little, I like the rhythm and repetition in this poem, both of which create a deep resonance.Georgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03959953035812596907noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-8681797382581590862010-11-23T17:48:56.488+00:002010-11-23T17:48:56.488+00:00Rachel - I must admit it. I unintentionally cocked...Rachel - I must admit it. I unintentionally cocked up the strict form. Any ideas, anyone, for a better, more formally correct pre-penultimate line?<br /><br />Thanks, Ruth. I wrote this (inspired by your own wonderful villanelle) in a couple of quick bursts before I went away, and, to be honest, was not that pleased with it. But then, when I got back and reread it, and altered a few things, it didn't seem quite as bad as I feared. Often the way, isn't it?The Solitary Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11284354541952038339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-19524526628649370902010-11-23T16:18:52.377+00:002010-11-23T16:18:52.377+00:00Oh Robert, this is incredible. First, it's goo...Oh Robert, this is incredible. First, it's good to see you back. But this. This villanelle is remarkably good. The refrain lines are very effective and evocative, and build with weight and meaning. The words "strange" and "darker" are so poignant, and they leave me with a melancholy soaked in beauty.<br /><br />Great job. And welcome back.Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14204074161539605133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8319797996494487653.post-60384351417510630362010-11-23T16:11:45.480+00:002010-11-23T16:11:45.480+00:00I like your 'darker wood'.
I always have ...I like your 'darker wood'.<br /><br />I always have AB rhymes in the last section (ABAA)... never done one with all As like this. <br /><br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.com